I was a young mom when I had my son. I was 16 years old. Everyone was so negative with me, never had nothing positive to say about me. I dropped out of school and started working. I didn’t have a real job but it was a little something for me to do. I helped my neighbors or close friends; like maybe clean the house and received a little cash from them. I was caught in struggling a little throughout life. I was constantly trying to show people that I could do it and raise my son without anybody’s help. I had my baby father around until my son was one years old. Then after that he was gone. I moved out as well. I moved in with a friend of mine. I told myself If kept going when everyone was talking about me while I was pregnant, then why should I stop now. I decided to raise my son on my own. I started believing that I wasn’t going to survive on my own, that I was going to fall down sooner or later. I was like in a cave. I struggled a little more on my own. There was a time when I was just thinking that maybe people was right, maybe I cannot do it on my own. At the same time, I didn’t want any help from nobody just because everyone was putting me down and being so negative. I had a friend of mine that moved in town and she helped me with my son, while I went to work. Then I finally got to put my son to school and started working some more. I saved out some money and rented a little place, just for me and my son. I escaped from the cave or the hole I was in. I have my own little place and raising my son on own. I could say I’m free and taking it a little further day by day. Now I could say if I did it on my own, anyone could do it as well. I’m still working and raising my son, while I’m currently enrolled in school. I want a better future to keep being there for my son and make sure I could give him what he needs. Things is not that easy but I could say I proved people wrong and dug myself out of the cave, now I don’t need to hear nothing else from nobody else. I am happy to be a single parent and I tell people all the times, “Don’t ever give up because there is always a time where we have to struggle sometime but sooner or later things are going to get better”. Keeping my head up and just listening to all the negative things people was saying, that’s what kept me going on. I heard everything and I just wanted to prove people wrong. Us being young, we do a lot of mistakes but people have to give you an opportunity so you could prove to them that you are not going to do the same mistake twice. I did it and now I’m doing well; and before you know it I’ll be doing better after I graduate with a career.
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